I saw her once,
in her little red dress.
Taking her time,
to sway this way and that...
Taking her time,
to sway this way and that...
But, later in a sweet surrender,
She would be beyond all...
And would fly out of the small body enclosing her.
And would fly out of the small body enclosing her.
This is ridiculously good. Great freakin imagery and interesting structure! In class when we were talking you made it sound like you weren't very good at poetry. Clearly you are.
ReplyDeleteTHis is excellent. Maybe you need to stop always saying you can't do things because it seems you can do just about everything and do it well.
ReplyDeleteI love this poem. It flows really nicely and gives great imagery. You can understand this girl and know how she feels. You portray this girl wonderfully and beautifully. I would love to read more poems if you have any.
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